Writing 101, Day Eight: Death to Adverbs

Writing 101, Day Eight: Death to Adverbs
Go to a public location and make a detailed report of what you see. The twist of the day? Write the post without adverbs.

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Restroom Incident

Right away, we noticed the long waiting line outside of the women’s restroom.

“Do we want to wait in line?” my sister Y asked.

“Do we have any choice?” I asked.

“It will go fast, I am sure,” my sister K said.

We stood at the end of line. Soon more women joined us. Someone was calling K’s name. Three of us turned around; it was K’s friend Tammy.

K tried to stay in line while talking to Tammy. Tammy talked and talked; the line kept moving forward. K gave up, decided to step aside to finish their conversation.

A moment later we moved inside of the restroom. I looked back and found K stood at the end of the line.

“You can come back here,” I said without thinking.

K came.

“Wait in line! Go back!” An angry woman, who was behind us, shouted.

“She was here before. She was talking to her friend and now she is back.” Wearing a smile on my face, I tried to explain the situation to that angry woman.

“Doesn’t matter! Go back!”

I could tell that K was embarrassed. She started moving back. Seeing she was willing to go back, I felt somewhat relieved. I knew I shouldn’t ask K to come, but I didn’t like how rude that woman was.

“You don’t have to go,” Y said, “Just don’t look at her.”

Y is our Kung-Fu kid. If the woman wanted to start a fight, I was certain Y could take care of her. Still, I took a quick look at the woman just to be sure. Yes, it will be a piece of cake for Y, I concluded.

I grabbed K’s arm. “Stay,” I said. I had never fought with anyone in my life; I had no idea what I was supposed to do. But, again, we had a kung-Fu kid in our team. I had confidence in Y. To make K feel more comfortable, we moved K to the front, away from that woman.

The woman continued saying something. We ignored her.

A minute later, when we got out of the restroom, I said to Y, “Good thing we have you here. I was scared.”

Y turned toward me. Keeping her eyes locked with mine, she said, “Me, too.”

K pointed her finger at us. “I will never listen to you two again!” she said.

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About Helen C

A retired computer programmer who loves writing and photographing, and has managed to publish a YA novel "Jin-Ling’s Two Left".
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8 Responses to Writing 101, Day Eight: Death to Adverbs

  1. Mother Hen says:

    Helen! I am so impressed! I am enjoying your short stories..You go girl.. lol!

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  2. Elizabeth says:

    Mother Hen is right, your stories are great. This one made me smile.

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    • Helen C says:

      Good morning, Elizabeth. Thank you for your comment. I always encourage people to tell their stories. We all have great stories!
      I asked Y if she was scared, why she told K not to go back to the end of line. Y said, “I didn’t know you guys would listen to me. I was shock .” 😉
      I am glad nothing bad happened on that day.

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  3. rommel says:

    Who knew a restroom area can be so eventful? I smelt blood. Ahihihi

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    • Helen C says:

      Good morning, Rommel. We did realize how lucky we were. It was at Atlantic City Trump Plaza. You never know what people might do after they lost a lot of money. 😉

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